It was about time for me to start writing this baby. So here's a link to the first capter and disclaimer. Actually, it is a link to my profile... But scroll down to the bottom, and you will see the fic!!!

Have fun reading it, if it does not bore you that much...

http://www.fanfiction.net/u/864640/

Wow that was fast! time to read!!

*clicks*


hey your name is Saifer? THAT IS SO COOL!!! XD

No...

My real name is different. Saifer's just my ultimate RP creation! XD Ask BR and GS. They know a lot about the guy.

Oh.... LOL


But still that name rocks! I wanted to name my kid that *dont ask, i get bored and start planing my life XD*

Desty Nova!! ^_^

Desty: What? How dare they fire me! I built this company! I'd better go insane, become the Green Goblin, and hunt down Spider-Man! Argh!

Desty: After which I'll pretend to get killed and retire to build genetic experiments.

Also! HA! That was awesome! I always wanted to know Nite's origin, more exactly! Can't wait until everybody else comes in! ^_^

OMG! NORMAL OSBOURNE! THE GREEN GOBLIN!

XD It does look like him!

-claps- HOORAY! That was quick, and it's GREAT! Write more soon! :lol:

This is pretty good so far. I can't say I really find any flaws in your writing. I know you want some feedback on anything you did wrong, but honestly, I see nothing wrong so far. And the fact this is leading up to the creation of Nite (at least I think that's what it's leading up to) is pretty exciting.

I do believe I left you a review via FFN, but that was before you uploaded the actual chapter, so now I shall review the actual story.

Being someone who is already familiar with Nite and Nova from the RPs, and from just chatting with you, it's really cool that we get to dive into the mystery of Nite's origin. I do like it. I'm anxiously awaiting the next few chapters, when I take it Sir Nite shall meet Sonic & Co?

Biggest Prop: Seeing Nite's Origin! Awesome. Makes me appreciate the character that much more, now that I see his beginning. Plus Nova was in it. XD

Mistakes?: Found no mistakes in the actual story. I did see a typo in your notes, but that was just a typo -- I've probably made more mistakes in this review, so don't get hung up on something like that.

Overall: <(^o^)> <(^o^)> <(^o^)> <(^o^)>
4 out of 4 Kirbys.

By the way... That picture up there is not exact. Nova does not have a blocky, square chin. His face is more triangular, pointed. You'll see what I mean if you take a look at a pic of him without his glasses.



As you see here, he has FAR from a blocky face...

EDIT: In case anyone wants to know, chapter 2 is up. I know it's a bit vague, but it's gonna get clearer as the story progresses, I can promise you that.

I just read chapter 2!

TOTALLY AWESOME!!! This is gonna be so great!!

Chapter 3's up, guys!

Tell me if I could improve or anything.

I just read chapter 3

So cool!!! I totally love how this story is coming out. You have so many characters with so many different personalities you're using/are going to use

Not to mention Sonic and co. They bring some tradition into your story ^_^

lol Solar makes me laugh ^_^

Most agreed! :D

We have more coming up soon? ^_^

Chapter 4: The first Domino is in progress.

lol I read it!!! It was so awesome!!!

Allright! Awesome, HA! :D

Talk about form equals meaning, HA- the walk through the forest was really well done! :D But when talking in the pluperfect, you gotta use 'had' or things get confusing. ^_^;
I totally know who the evil hiding lady is!



Rosie O'Donnel, right? XD

She's NOT who you think. I will just tell you that. She is NOT who you think she is.

I think I know who it is, but you said it isn't who I think it is and...uh....@_@ Yeah, I'm confused. I THINK I know who it is, if it's one of teh people ya asked me to draw (and, BTW, teh art trade will be done very soon), but ya might be messin' with our heads (which I know you enjoy doing).

What makes you think I like to mess with your minds???

*shifty eyes, shifty eyes*

But yu may be right, Kimiko... Or you may be wrong. Wut can you really say that right is wrong and wrong is right?

EDIT: Chappy 5 is done!!! Yeah!

Hey! Is this topic still alive? OOr does it need shock therapy?

Sorry for the double post, guys, but how else would you know that I have chapters 5 and 6 done if I just edit my last post again? Jeez... This topic needs to be more active...

Come on, guys! Discuss the story! Where can I improve? What did you like in particular? Do you have any ideas you want to give me? Did you read it at all? Does it suck? Does it make you puke? Does it... Oh never mind that!

You can't imagine how it would help.

And since your feedbacks and reviews on FF.net are not very informative, let's just change the review section to this topic, okay?

Again, sorry to you moderators! I know I'm doing illegal things YET AGAIN!!!

I am so bad... XD

But seriously, sorry for the double post.

I just want this place to get a new meaning, stay alive, and be my info board for the chapters!

:o -le gasp!- THAT'S SOOOOOOO COOL! Sandra showed Eggamn what for! XD THat was SO awesome. I promise to help keep this alive, HA. :)

Meanwhile -pulls out flame thrower- DAMN SCANNER PROBLEMS!

What's wrong with the scanner? I might be able to help...

was working just fine until teh program crashed, and I had to uninstall it. When I tried to REinstall it, it said I had to disconnect a cable that I'd already disconnected. EVIL SCANNER!

great chapter HA

Don't go too in-depth there, GS. XD Totally just kidding dude, I know you got a lot goin' on today. :) At least you read it. Not gonna lie, I didn't read either of them yet. Pretty busy myself, today. But here's a glimpse at my To-Do List:

1) Read HA's fanfic.
2) Feed pets.
3) Finish HA's sprites
4) Start homework

It's right up there! :D

Jeez, everyone's busy, busy, busy...

Not that I blame you guys! It's just that if very little people read the stuff and give me feedback, I kinda lose inspiration... Look what happened to Mind's Eye!!!

As for the scanner...

I have an idea.

But you will have to contact me via something else other than this place for detailed instructions. I don;t want you messing with incorrect functions unless you won;t touch anything else. But I have an idea and it might work.

In other words, Kimi, do you use any messanger system? IRC, MSN, AIM (preferably not... I don't have it), ICQ... If you use any of those then things will be easy.

u_u Dude, I was in the bedroom computer and its hard to type cause I have to keep this leg elevated and to do that the leg must be on the bed, and its hard to bend my body to type. X_X

Anyway, HA, this story is great man. I like it, just like I liked your Titans fic. I hope to see more soon, ya dig? You're a good writer man, keep it up.

I'm not a good writer. I know I am not.

Maybe I'm improving.

But I'm not a good writer. I try, but I'm just not good enough. I'll keep writing and improving of course, if you guys keep reading it and actually CRITIQUE it once in a while!

I'm the writer I am because I've recieved help from a professional writer. I';m just asking you guys to tell me all my weak points so I can strengthen them!

-ish probably grave-digging, but will take that risk-

NO! -quickly copies FLCL by posing as a nurse- SHOCK THEROPY! CLEAR! -zaps topic-

BREATHE, DANGIT! :cry:

..but Seriously, I like this fan fic, I hope you'll continue soon, HA. :3

*Zoidberg snaps on rubber glove*

Zoidberg: Don't worry, I'll handle it! Now where's that anesthetic?
*takes out huge mallet*

WERD UP to what Kimeh said. LIVE, fanfic, LIVE!

Indeed.

HA needs to write more. I shall join teh club!

*puts on T-shirt that says 'Write more Stellar' & matching baseball cap*

Maybe HA's just in a slump. I get into those with my fics all teh times. It's been a month since I last updated my Titans fic.

Hopefully, though, HA will be better about it than me; and he will update soon.

Like... tomorrow. Or today, rather, since it's past midnight. :D